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Tic-Tac-Toe

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You play tic-tac-toe with my emotions
Full of x's and o's as you cross out my heart
With x's across its beating veins.
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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

This was short, graphic and to the point.

I am seldom a fan of "spoken word" poetry, because it seems so easy, I mean - who doesn't have a story to tell, and how much easier is it to tell when you don't have to worry about cadence and rhyme?

BUT, like some all the other art forms on DA, this one has it's pearls and it's sow's ears, and I found this one a pearl!

It may be because Lucky Lisa is on my watchlist, and thus, I know that's she's not as lucky in love and that this was written in tears and blood, so to speak.

But it's also because the length and flat tone combined with a really graphic verbal image to provide a kind of "punch, punch, kick" feel that brought an emotional response to me as a reader - which is what (in my opinion) poetry is supposed to do.

In closing, I'll point out that I read another by this writer today that I couldn't critique, because it made me too blue.

I can't think of higher praise for a writer - LMAO