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Catch Me Before I Fall

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Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard my body cracked
My heart shattered within
Shutting myself down
Closing up to others
My silence forever kept
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My horrors now revealed
You're gone forever
And I'm standing here alone
Lost and foresaken
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
My visions now hazed
Coldness seeping in
Freezing my internal organs
Lost in time and space
Frozen expressions of sadness
No longer do I exist
Catch me before I fall
But it's too late
For I have already fallen
Hit so hard I died in an instant
a poem....
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I have posted my suggestion before. But I'm here to remind you to use a subject or more to be inside your poem. As I know, a subjectlless poem is quite boring and not interesting to read. I'm not judging you that your poems are bad, but I just want to make them better. I hope you can understand that I'm not a professional yet in poetry, but at least I know how to write a poem worth reading for. You may want to take a look for my poems and then you'll understand what I mean.
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